Future World Orders

Great story, waiting for more chapter, has a lot of potential, and whoever comes here first before reading this great story you are wasting you time, just go, go and read this wonderful story by Gideon.

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Heya, I'm this book's author. Because I'm a new writer, I have almost no experience on writing novel before. I'd like to know if there's a room for improvement for me. PS: I haven't do another round of editing on older version. I planned to do it once it's done.

After reading the first few chapters, I can tell the story has potential. But you tend to make the lines too long. Okay, it's not a problem when the sentence is free from grammatical mistakes. But when the line is long and there are grammatical errors, it makes the sense of the line hard to understand. So, it would be great if you proofread the story. However, good work overall!

I really love your story’s plot and pacing. I’m surprised that this is your first novel; it’s so well paced! In terms of writing quality, there’s some life-changing advice I’d like to give you in order to elevate it: never use the same word twice within a sentence. That’s it. For example, a sentence that goes: He felt his lungs imploding as if they would collapse within him. VS He felt his lungs imploding as if his lungs would collapse within him. In my opinion, the first alternative sounds better because it there’s a freshness to it versus the second, more repetitive one, chiming one. This is just my opinion, of course! Again, I truly enjoyed reading this so a hearty 5/5 to you, my friend! ✨

The cyberpunk type of world is there. The author has a lot of imagination and immersion. Over all, it will be interesting to see where the plot line goes. Enjoy the ‘platoon’ combat command type of writing. Keep up the good work!

Good starting of the story, new approach and new theme for me, War, Future Do the best author, I am looking forward to it.

Very interesting, the autor is setting the stage for a nice story. It seems like a complex world, I am looking forward to reading what will become of Seth.

hi Author i love it its an another sci- fic and i love it specially the way you describe it in so detail i love it and you author keep going and for the people who Didn't read this book 😂

This is just awesome and I loved how you gave this a variety of perspective of view. Seth's story is amazing so far. This book has a very good potential and I hope the author doesn't stop writing. Dropping this now will be equal to death 😂. SO AUTHOR KEEP ON WRITING AND DON'T STOP!!!

It's another sci-fi novel that seems to have a lot of potential. I'm really looking forward to the future chapters to come, and also really interested and what's going to happen to Seth after the ordeal he has suffered through in the first chapter. Let's pray for more chapters in the future!

My friend recommended this story to me. Turned out this story is amazing. I love the last part of the chapter <3 To be honest, this story isn't my cup of tea. So I will give this general advice... Maybe Author Gideon could release more chapter in one week? Maybe 2 chap/week if the chapter isn't that long. But anw, it is up to Author Gideon~ Take your time, since writing need a lot of energy and time. Best of luck! To Author and to Seth too xD (Whisper) Also careful with typo in future hehe ;) Twinkle twinkle little star I'm impressed by this so far [img=update]

Some parts of the story that were a bit questionable and that could be improved. The first line was too factual. It’s very much like you're stating a fact or writing an essay rather than writing everything a story. The use of the word actually or usually it’s a bit awkward because in conversations is when you usually would use the word actually or usually and not in writing because it doesn’t make sense nor does it fit in as a colloquial language, so it makes it awkwardly placed. In my opinion it’s better to explain the plot of the story using your practice like in a conversation or in a social setting the personality and beliefs et cetera. You could also incorporate or try to use adjectives, similes and descriptive words because your story could appeal more to readers that way. It also feels very choppy when you start a paragraph with “that day” or a date so that should be avoided. it also feels that your squeezing in information on when you can actually introduce it gradually you can also try writing in Google Docs or using grammarly because it can suggest better words to use or correct your grammar and as such. what are some of the things that I love about the story was The story has a great storyline. the plot is solid and it leaves a lot of room for improvement so that means your story can be very made 10x much better The use of the onomatopoeia was really good too. It contributed to the smoothness or appeal to the reader. The ending also left me in suspense, making me look forward to the next chapter. Adding of the character’s feelings also shaped the story. The use of good vocabulary was also something I enjoyed.

The imagery portrayed by the author is amazing. They way he explains the protaginists feelings and his thoughts are amazing. The author has easily hooked us onto the story of his world and his protagonists.

I really liked this one, if you want a novel with good story and unique ideas , you can start with it. The introduction gives the complete situation of the world. Loved it.[img=update]

Oh, I'm the first review, better put my best foot forward. So to start really liked this one, this seems like a story where the world is going to shine a lot, while the exposition dump might be off-putting at the beginning I think it can be useful at times. The use of onomatopoeia just as long as it's formatted well, that aside I hope to see more good things from this one!