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FORBIDDEN LOVE- A PILE OF PAST MISTAKES.

Autor: stella2138
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"Do you take this beautiful maiden before you as your lawfully wedded wife, the one you will cherish till you breathe your last? "asked the marriage official. "Yes, I..." The groom was unable to finish his reply when the whole place shook and a scary-looking woman appeared not far from the soon to wed couple. "I do not agree to this marriage," the lady said and then raised her hands to the roof and shot 4 beams of light. The whole place began to shake and guests ran away for their life. How did it come to this situation? Why is there an objection to this marriage? Find out in this interesting mystery thriller romance story that will keep you glued to your seat. --------- The cover isn't mine. All credits to the artist. Your votes, comments, and reviews are appreciated.

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Chapter 1FIRED

A lady of 18 years hurries into a restaurant-Melrose restaurant sweating lightly. It is about 6: 00 pm and there are no customers in the restaurant which was unusual.

Waiting for her on a seat was her boss Mr chuks. He clapped while smirking.

The young girl trembled at this sight. She knew she was done for.

"Brianna what's with you?" said the man in his fifties.

Brianna immediately knelt

"Boss I'm sorry. Forgive me just this once. I will never come late again" Brianna said close to tears. "How long will you keep saying that? I no longer need you. Please use the door." Mr. Chuks spoke coldly.

"Boss, please give me one more chance. I will never be late again. I promise! Please, sir, have mercy."Brianna cried but her boss only laughed coldly.

"You know Brianna you are surely funny. You want me to go bankrupt before you understand? What am I saying? Just go! I don't need you any longer.'' the man barked.

Brianna got up slowly and replied "Boss I... I understand... I do. I promise that I won't ever appear before you again.'' she then removed her badge and placed it gently on the table.

"There! Boss, I'm leaving. Goodbye"she said in a low voice and walked out of the store never looking back.

Mr. chuks sighed and for once more he surveyed the shop with her eyes and gave off a bitter smile.

"Girl, I am sorry but this is the best I can do for you. I cannot let you suffer for no reason. I hope you find a better job. I'm bankrupt and cannot even feed myself well. I hope you don't hate me." Mr. Chuks said as he got up from the seat after putting the badge in his pockets.

He then locked up the shop and walked away.

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The novel has potential. Writing Quality: I gave it a 3* because my eyes hurt. The grammar is adequate but Author has problems with typing with Caps lock on or is unable to have proper punctuations when the Caps are not used. If it doesn't bother you, then it's fine but for me, my brain just shuts down a bit when the whole chapter is all in caps or there are no capital letters at all. Also, I find the chapters to be too short. Extremely short. It's like reading one or two paragraphs with no real context before the next chapter. I would advice Author to have about 900 words at least? It would allow you to develop the characters more, and also not frustrate your readers who may be waiting for an update - only to get a paragraph or two without anything new. Stability of Updates: Too soon to tell but I gave it a 5* in good faith. Story Development: 4* - It's getting there. The slow romance is not a problem or how it develops is not a problem. I can't really comment on Character Design or World Background even though I've read until Chapter 38 before doing the review. I normally read about 10 - 20 chapters to get a feel. However, since the chapters here were really short, not much progress or insight to the characters could really be seen even at this point. Still, I gave it a 4* for the potential it has. It is best if you look through your chapters before posting it. Sometimes, re-reading what you wrote can give you more inspiration besides spotting mistakes. All the best, Author.

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