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Fallen Immortal Son: Rebirth in the World of Magic; A Cultivating Mage.

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Twenty years Old Xuan Ren the Son of Immortal has Fallen in the battle of the 'Sacred-Purge' saving the cultivation world from the Demonic infiltration. Just as he thought he died after he tried to save the World, Xuan Ren woke up in the body of a 16 years old Xuan Ryu, who committed suicide because of his lack of talent in magic and the constant humiliation he received. Will he learn magic? or just cultivate in the world of Magic? How does the Magic world works?

Chapter 1Rebirth.

Xuan Ren opened his eyes inside the Coffin only to be assaulted by a sudden pain inside his head. A bunch of unknown memories flashed inside his memory as if someone has opened his memory line and planted these new memories.

*Memories*

Xuan Ryu: Xuan Ryu is a 16-Year-old Hulk size kid with ordinary black hair and black eyes, He looks like a giant 5 feet 9-inch pig with zero talent in magic, random kids around his age were around level -3 few geniuses were in level-4 but Xuan Ryu was struck in level-1.

He was born in a normal family leading a normal life but when he turned 10 his parents died in a Beast attack protecting him and his sister Akane. Ryu got a wound on his head damaging his brain cells which affected his thinking ability, he didn't become dumb but more as a genius fell to mediocre. Akane was 15 years old she was one year younger than Ryu, she was not his sister by blood but his stepsister, Xuan Ryu's mother died giving birth to him so his father remarried. Akane was the daughter of his 2nd mother who remarried his father after her divorce with her first husband.

After his parent's death, there was no news about Akane's biological father so both of them stayed together.

Akane was a beautiful girl with blue hair and blue eyes, she was one of the top 10 beauties in the academy admired by everyone she was also a genius at level-4 a step away from level-5. Even though she was a beauty and a genius she treaded Xuan Ryu as her real brother and protect him.

Xuan Ryu was bullied and hated by everyone just because he was living with Akane, added to his cowardice and lack of talent in magic he committed suicide.

With the sudden assault of these memories, Xuan Ren understood the current situation, but he didn't try to make any guess because his original soul was broken and will disperse at any moment.

After thinking for a moment Xuan Ren started to observe the new body, just as he was studying the new body he saw the dispersing soul of Xuan Ryu, he got an idea and started absorbing the dispersing soul into his broken soul. After some time he completely absorbed the soul of Xuan Ryu.

His broken soul became complete not only that but because he absorbed Xuan Ryu's soul, his soul and body got synced perfectly leaving no potential threats in the future, Xuan Ren was assaulted by the new memories before so it didn't affect him much after merging with the soul and got assaulted again for the 2nd time thus the new Xuan Ren Ryu was born.

Like this Xuan Ryu nor Xuan Ren died, both of their souls merged perfectly giving birth to Xuan Ren Ryu.

As for the personality, he retained both personalities.

Xuan Ren Ryu: Had both personalities of Xuan Ren and Xuan Ryu.

Xuan Ren Ryu broke open the coffin lid giving a sudden fright to everyone who visited to send him off.

Akane rushed forward, hugged him and cried saying ''brother you are alive? I thought you left me too.''

''Sorry for worrying you, I thought I was dead too after someone pushed me into the river'' said Xuan Ren Ryu. a.k.a Ryu.

Some of the people who attended to his funeral asked him ''pushed you into the river? it's not suicide?''

Ryu didn't answer but looked dumbly at the person who asked the question. that person felt embarrassed.

There are a lot of people who attended the funeral like his relatives, who were after his properties like the house,... rest of them were students, teachers, principle,... most of them were here for Akane.

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While this is definitely a promising novel there are a few flaws that I feel need to be addressed in order for it to reach its potential. Writing quality: 3/5- It may not be the worst novel I have read in terms of writing quality there are numerous grammatical and spelling errors throughout. Add in random missing words and it definitely leaves something to be desired. Stability of updates: 5/5- The author has given us 24 chapters in 13 days at this point with 2 chapters a day being the norm I have no complaints. Story Development: 4/5- While it is still early in the novel it seems to be developing at a steady pace. There are a few issues with the character development that could be fixed but nothing to major. Character Design: 1/5- The MC is in serious need of an overhaul. I swear this guys personality is like watching someone with multiple personality disorder. I get his soul is a fusion of two different people and he doesn't want to choose one personality over the other but come on. On one had you have the soul of a powerful sword immortal who once stood at the apex of cultivation, on the other the soul of a obese bullied cripple with no backbone. A proper fusion would give you a slightly arrogant attitude that is also willing to listen to reason. Instead what we get is your basic Japanese protagonist who lets his "teacher" walk all over him, while at other times he is vicious and uncaring such as the scenes where he is dealing with his bully's. This at times makes reading this story extremely painful. I'm sorry but with the history given for the MC he should in no way be such a passive beta. Then you got the recently introduced granddaughter of his "master" who upon seeing him in his slimmer form asks him to marry her. While this is understandable looks do influnce how people treat someone it goes as far as the girl who is 7 years younger than the MC getting aggressive with the MC's teacher who it states is like a big sister to her. This is in no way realistic you are not gonna risk ruining a relationship with someone who is like family for someone you just met minutes before. World Background: 4/5- While the world is still being revealed to us most of the info is given to us in chunks of authors notes at the begining of each chapter. Firstly these are distracting from the story and should be removed and placed in an auxiliary chapter. Next while you can say the MC didn't need to learn this due to the memories he gained during the soul fusion, I feel the need to point out you have stated the original soul of the body he is currently in was suffering from brain damage. Why would he just accept the information received from someone with brain damage without even trying to double check any of it I mean come on he is attending an academy how hard is it to visit the library and read a few books on the world he is living in? While it may seem like I am being unreasonable harsh in my review I got to say I really enjoyed the concept of this story and think that with some tweaks it would easily become a great novel.

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