*My First novel hope it will be good *Will have inconsistent updating because it is more of a passion project *Please Criticise my work as much as possible I want to write a good novel and I am not afraid to edit whole chapters. It would be good if you could explain what I did wrong as well. *It's not a normal sports novel the sport is a made up one *It doesn't take place in our world --------------------------------------------------------------- A man was surrounded by his family and friends. He was clearly on his death bed just on the edge of death 'So.. I guess I am dying.... I wasn't able to complete in the pro league... I tried my best but I simply started too late.. .Fuck I don't want to die I want to live play I wanted to play even more if I just had one more chance just one more damnit.' Just as he died he heard something [Host has been deemed interesting installing system] --------------------------------------------------------------- I hope I wrote a catching enough start I have been reading alot of sports novel with system and wanted to write my own but I just don't have enough experience to be able to write it so I just made a new sport Hope You Enjoy!