worldheart

This is sad. It was an amazing story, but readers want to be authors, which makes the process suck. Good luck with your cs degree and in life.

That was too short, and nothing really happened narratively. You don't need to add much more, but chapters like these are for foreshadowing. I like that you do that right at the end, but the chapter could be summarized as Spring is here random raid, "we need them alive." add a little more detail, such as where they are raiding, who do they want alive, maybe add the perspective of a random person that you can use in the future either in the main plot or to show how the society has advanced/changed due to the actions of the main characters.

feel you man get well soon

i just realized the team is the penguins of Madagascar

in the same boat as you man get well

yes

just jinx

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