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old cartoon on cartoon network xiaolin showdown really good show when I was young.

it's a amazing novel gamer plus devour is a amazing concept u just need more of it other than that I like your weighting.

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or a support skill like acceleration pad

mine walk everywhere he walks is a bomb or trap

I love gamer fanfics this has potential.

your fanfic is good the treason why they have issues is many 1.they can't write so they envy what they can not do like a celeberty on a series.2.they dont like the story because it's diffrent than what they like here is the issue with that a there is 7.7 billion guess estimate on earth and no one likes or is100 percent the same so they hate it when its going perfect until some chapter and then somthing changes like a gamer get nerfed or a harem gets involed then they hate on a pretty good novel3.some people rip on people to get joy on there sad depressing live these are call internet trolls you see if u got bullied and could not fight at home school or work or everyday life why not troll to realese your issue on a good guy how is trying to perfect your art the thing is this stops some of the best author,artist and actors from succeeding in life.pretty much haters going to hate.p.s look up anime spech bleach:perfection and us that in your everyday life.use there hate and advice but it's your story finish it your way then on the next make improvement screw them screw them all.

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