hey back saw message also cant find you as pinpal342

By the way I can't find you on discord I have looked for TheWriterOfOrigins no one with that name pops up. Also sorry for the very late reply you can look me up my name is almost the same it's myrthuamber

Sorry I sort of left the website after it became money oriented and no longer about actual reading or writing

Yo author just got back and first thing i check was how far you gone in your writing but seems you are stuck with writers block or maybe you been busy.

If you are fine with google translate then search for the following on google 系统的黑科技网吧 its this novels name in Chinese. one of those pages should have the other novels as well the only thing is the where never translated its a shame u.u

u.u nooo it was deleted ;-; i wanted to know more and also wanted to suggest more for the cast like FUNA sensei's characters sdfdfsfwerewrasd

George YES I HAVE BEEN Healed now you die XD Don't know why it made me laugh but it did

True answer to have the implementation of Spirit Stones not receive backlash. Before there was ads everything was free but then they added ads to show "support" for the authors. A year later the paywall know as Spirit Stones was added but since Spirit Stones was the currency use in there flagship series "Library of Heaven's Path" most people jump aboard and well the situation develop to what it is now. Anyway now I think this ad feature only available in the webnovels app but i am not sure if its still there since i refuse to download it. Anyone know if its still available there

Have no idea if you still looking for the answer but it was discontinued

It was discontinued about the time the power stones and energy stones where introduce at which time they implemented the adds into there app. Then when they made a hard push for there app it was discontinued there as well this chapter is a remain of what once was.

Nice knowing that there have been more people reviewing your novel. I have analysis some of what I have commented and realize, That some of my advice id probably not what you need right now since as a new writer what you need is to finish developing you outline, So as an honest recommendation continue to develop your novel as it is, the reason being that you are probably writing what ever you imagine happening to Sarah on paper before you forget. This is good because by the end you will have an outline of everything you imagine happening to her you can then you can expand that outline later and refine it. Because if you start going down the route of what I have said then we might never see the end of your initial idea. As your work stands right now is a great as a first draft of imagining scenarios and events but it lacks development. You can then further refine your idea by developing plot points characters and so on, this will cause your world o increase and expand. and since you would already have a complete outline from beginning to end then you will not be stuck later on. Stuff like Character development, World development, Developing the magic system, all of this things will open a lot of routes for you once you look into them. I guess what you need is more practice, Go at it an write. n.n/

I left a couple of comments in the paragraphs of the first couple of chapters maybe those ideas could help you establish your novel apart from what originally inspire you hope they help you.

(Voice in Mind: Yes yes focus Young One, Oh wait don't focus to much, drat. ) Conditions met Common Skill: True Sight activated This is an example of what the voice can say

If you are going with the voice thing you can have it talk with her every time she thinks in her mind

Depending on where you want your book to go you can give this sentence a voice such as a holy voice randomly says Appraisal activated in Sarah mind or a Wizen Voice says Appraisal activated. By doing this you can have Sarah later interact with the voice while she explores the forest.

Great start after the prologue since the reader like Sarah have first open there eyes to this world its a great self insert. if you want to add some comedy you can added it here such as have the slime just disappear when she punch it back. she then looks around and see another Slime without realizing its another just finding it weird that its another color or something like that.

After showing you the potential of your novel i will now show you the potential in your title Life in a New World is Easy, Or Am I Just A Pro. The name of your title has potential for the novel to have comedic elements. With that title you can get away with having an oblivious character and having stuff just happen around them. With the way you have written it so far this points can be added without messing what you have written so far.

This one chapter I considered is the holy grail of what the world revolves around you can say it is a key moment in the history of your world. Quin a church official who for the greater good drain an Angel to obtain its power could be considered a great evil the first time reading this chapter I thought Quin drain the Angel and went to fight the Demons and in a great flash he exploded and had his body disintegrate. but nothing is said about his spirit. oh there is so much that can be done with Quin he could be a big bad that is trying to resurrect himself or a wise mentor he could be the skill that you name google. There is so much that he can become. As this chapter stand it is almost perfect maybe a little embellishing about the events of the war you could probably introduce the names of the leaders of the angels and demons if you want to restart the war or you can leave it as is there is great mystery in this chapter and all question can be answer in the future. One question that it left open was what happen to quin after he disintegrated since there was a first holy war there must have been a second and what happen to the drain angel. You can combine this chapter with the previous and make an average length chapter as your prologue instead of having a two chapter prologue.

Depending on how you left the end of the first chapter you can continue its development by saying that it was involve in the First Holy War or you can just start by describing the first holy war The First Holy War started when demon race and angel race went to war against each other. The human race had nothing to do with the battle but Quin, the first church official, saw the battle against both races

Ages Past, Civilizations Fall, Great Beings Become Legends and Names Change all of this are things that happen within the great game of life; and one of those many things to have change is the name of a large and grand forest now know as the Great Founding Forest. : :.............................................. . The action that the first chapter of any novel has to do is to hook the audience there are many ways to achieve this, I just like hooking people with a mystery with this first sentence I have written people would ask themselves what other names has it had in the past. You can know : : ........................................ Now that there is a mystery you can introduce some titles in a sort of list style but without going over board. a way to do it is like so. . . ............................................. One of the first names written down is the Forest of Eternal Life, For deep within it there is believe to be a Tree name The Eternal Tree of Life planted by the hand of the creator. One of the effects of Gods very act of planting is the high concentration of a substance know as magicules around the tree. Another side effect was that the first individuals of the tribes of the world first appear here. . : .:::::::::::::::::::::::::::::: Another of its many titles is the Summit of Light and Dark for deep within there is a peak where the first Demonlord and Celestial Sage were inaugurated : : ........................: You can continue to introduce other titles and places within the forest you see you spend so little time within the forest that so much potential is lost. I feel the first volume should be about exploring the forest and seeing what is inside. List what ever you think would be great to explore maybe a cavern, a lake, a monolith whatever you want. The only thing to leave as the final place is something that would lead in to the title of your next chapter The First Holy War it could be a fallen sword or a statue of an angel or what ever just leave people wanting to come back to read more