Battler83

I like abrupt transitions, but this could have used a little more build up at least a sentence

No problem your story is excellent

Glad to see you are back hope you had happy holidays

Author are you ok, we have not heard from you in a while are you on break

So she is crazy

Did I miss it or did they not say why Jenna is killed by this?

When did I say they were innocent? I am just saying they have gone through hardships simply due to the circumstances of their birth and while that is not uncommon in the story or the real world it still is a sad and pityable state.

This could have been the mother's plan all along, use this book to bring the apocalypse sooner

Excellent concept, biggest problem with this story is there is not enough

At about chapter 30. Story is ok and well written, but suffers from a know it all protagonist. While he is not that much of a jerk he is prepared for everything and faces little in terms challenge and very little potential for character emotional growth. The story has potential, but it could very easily be better if emotions were realistically described. It is what it and I have definitely seen way way worse, but at the end of the day it does not really have anything that is worth more of my time.