Danilo_9178

Great fic really. Good to very good translation with very few errors in grammar. A single noteworthy awkward word: eyepatch instead of bandage or headband in case of Kakashi, when the Sharingan is mentioned begin used. No change of names middle story for a Chinese name. As for the story: The premise is well constructed and explored and since the premise is explicit create a noteworthy and not cringe character who is a Spotlight Stealing Squad, look for the Tv tropes link for more info, the fact the Hanabi in any other story would be a MarySue is forgiven because despise the fact she really lives in the Naruto World her goals are totally different from the rest of the world. And those goals are not only well established but they are not just handed out to her and she does work for them and the rules which she has to adhere to are well thought out. The different POV are well made and you can feel how each character no matter how little they said or thought in their POV each has different voice. The comedy is well written and not forced and drama is well handle because again despite the in universe story is just the normal Naruto manga story, Hanabi exploited those dramatic moments to her advantage without break character or ruthless crush everyone else. Oh sure she exploited Kakashi test but even that was used by the author and Hanabi to make everyone more compelling as character to the in universe audience. In fact I said if Kishimoto himself had used the bell test and first training arc in a similar way as this fic it would be even better than it was in the original. Honestly love this fic.

that was a fine speech. this fic has surprisingly nice and neat and well organized chapters/moments. both the author and translator have done a great job with everything so far.