AlexEys

Honestly, buddy, each chapter should ideally have a memorable point, something that leaves the reader with some kind of thought or feeling after reading it. So far, the experience has been very 'balanced'. It just feels like there are no ups and downs in terms of rhythm. Maybe it's just because the rhythm is slow, but I don't feel any anticipation. It's that kind of rhythm where the atmosphere gets more and more tense, like we're about to enter a crucial moment. Oh, right, page six, it starts with:Oh… that sentence is missing a "" at the end. Incidentally, from the reader's perspective, I've seen some formats like this. "xxxxxx" "xxxxxx" "xxxxxx" Honestly, based on my personal experience, it's a bit confusing. If it's just one person saying one sentence, it's fine, but if it's just one person saying two sentences, it becomes very confusing, and you have to pause and think about who is saying what.

Hmm, I haven't seen a female character who clearly has feelings for the male lead and has a strong presence in the main storyline yet. Is this book without a female lead?

I'm also wondering what I've found strange about this book so far. Aside from the exorcism scenes, the emotional fluctuations have been relatively flat for most of the time. There's little conflict or confrontation, some ambiguity and friendship, but overall it's rather straightforward.

Oh? It seems things are finally getting interesting, and we've entered the next chapter. To be honest, the transition in the middle was a bit bland, but hopefully it will get more exciting later on. The crime scene description is excellent—simple yet effective, and vividly depicted as sinister. I look forward to the next chapter.

The chapters are warm and peaceful, transitioning between everyday life, and there's nothing to criticize.

Oh? It seems we're finally getting to the point. So far, I've been searching for something: long-term goals. Short-term and medium-term goals are visible, but MC's long-term goals remain vague.

Up to Chapter 10, there have been no intense battle scenes yet. If this book is not a traditional fantasy novel, it's fine. However, if it contains battle chapters and they make up a significant portion of the story, the fact that there hasn't been a single battle chapter yet indicates a very slow start.

I am not an experienced writer, so the following is just advice. If possible, try to complete the previous scene before the transition, for example, by explicitly mentioning the end through dialogue. for example: Scene 1: The male protagonist is eating. Scene 2: A preview of the NPC scene in the next chapter. You could consider ending the current scene completely before the transition by saying things like "finish eating and pay the bill," "go for a stroll on the street," or "go home." This would make the transition less abrupt. P.S.: I rarely log into this account, so I may not be able to reply to your inquiries promptly.

A transitional chapter with nothing to criticize; it seems the next big chapter is about to begin. Well, the downside of reading one chapter a day is definitely showing; I can't quite remember what the relationship is between MC and this lady.

If talking a little more makes her Eminem, then if her words were a little sharper and she added a touch of satirical art, she could become Slim Shady, haha. This chapter has four scene transitions, but none of them flow smoothly and feel a bit abrupt. The second half of the chapter is clearly a setup for the next chapter and is disconnected from the first half.