Key_Hollow

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maybe its too early and i am wrong, but you're diverging so far from canon that i have doubts about wether this story covers more than 5 years

So his Mayfly jutsu is already forgotten?

If you turn off your brain, its not that bad. 1. Wrirring quality is probably its best point. The grammar is good, vocabulary is alright. 4/5 because i suspect a bit of AI here and there but its not too blatant. 2.Story Development isnt bad when it comes to the system concept, except that the system is vague and too OP. Cities and battl3s won too easily. However the main issue is the various plot holes. Its like the entire story happens in a vacuum. The most damaging one is that the Tullys dont even feature at any point in the W5K. I don't mind the smut, but it feels like the plot is massively sacrificed for smut. 2/5 3. Caracter's appearance isnt really described. We don't even know his height. 1/5 4. Dont know about the updates, i started when there were 175 chapters out. 3/5 to be safe. 5. Not much world background. i get that Throne is the main focus but we don't know what is going on in Essos, and most importantly we dont know what is going on with Jon at the wall, its not even mentionned that he went to the wall. 2/5

I can smell an undertone of AI. not enough to sour the novel, but enough to notice.

Listen here fucktards, this novel isn't bad at all, but eill most likely run into 500+ chapters at this rate unless its dropped soon. I read up to chapter 107 and literally 2 weeks have passed. The writting quality is good; a few grammatical mistakes here and there. The world building and detail is good. The MC has a shit name but he is alright. My issue is that the pace is incredibly slow and the chapters are not only short , they also don't cover much. Expect a single conversation to take 3 chapters at times. This is a case of "I'll let the author cook for a year and then come back to see if he is serious".

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