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bob_bob_76097 months agoPostedI think I did a good enough job. I like writing and so as the author of this tale I am proud to have put something out there. Sure, it may need some polish or have the occasional typo but I put my heart into it.
- bob_bob_7609a year agoReplied to icumbob7609
The machine has no tongue. bro could probably vibrate his dih though.
This book has been deleted. - bob_bob_7609a year agoReplied to icumbob7609
Yes, Characters mention contemporary works and Cars would definitely have been one of them. But not cars 3, my story, so Cars 3 is not included.
This book has been deleted. - bob_bob_7609a year agoPosted
This does not read like a web novel. This reads like the kind of book you find a three hour video essay on and then get a hyper fixation about for the next year and a half. The way everything is described is beautifully alien when it needs to be and painfully human when it's time for introspection. The world that is presented is one that challenges the reader's understanding of fiction as a medium. It's like the classic dilemma of, if a tree falls and no one is around to hear it, does it make a sound? This novel presents a surreal and gripping view of this question, all supported by the strong human element. The chapters here so far really gave me a sense of wonder and curiosity. Please keep writing.
- bob_bob_7609a year agoCommented
wow, genuinely wow. This was bizarre, surreal and utterly sublime.
- bob_bob_7609a year agoPosted
the writing here is solid. in the first few chapters you help create a sense of relatability around Damon and the frequent updates are quite the upside. the main issue lies in the pacing. This novel moves fast, too fast to really let the reader get a proper grasp on things. There is always something happening and while that does help keep the reader engaged, it also prevents the reader from truly taking in the plot developments. take the first chapter for example. The system shows up and Damon just sighs and gets on with his day. I honestly think this could be really good if it just was a little slower. Overall it's a fun read, just needs some work in regards to pacing.
- bob_bob_7609a year agoCommented
I beg you ladies and gents. leave a review boost me on the algorithm. It would be really appreciated and honestly any compliment would really make my day thanks.
- bob_bob_7609a year agoReplied to Cyclochlorohexan
thanks, like genuinely thanks. your the jujutsu to my kaisen
This book has been deleted. - bob_bob_7609a year agoReplied to Cyclochlorohexan
you just made my day man
This book has been deleted. - bob_bob_7609a year agoCommented
hi y'all. please enjoy my first attempt at posting something.
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