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thank you i should change that now

Thank you

I like the characters a lot and interactions. And there is some funny words that I enjoy you should post more consistently I enjoy the story thus far itself

I like the dynamics of the first chapter it’s a nice start just I feeling the prose and writing seems a bit bland and lack’s imagery. To should have on the pride to feel natural in the story and he will be good

The writting can be much better I feel like the prose etc but I like the story other then the overall writing keep it up though I like the characters a lot

This story is amazing I love first person story’s keep up the good work just maybe all the I’s you can fix and use other words because it’s a bit repetitive but it’s really good

Third is amazing i just been liking first person getting into the characters thoughts better in my Opinion

Like first person but it’s third person

This so interesting actually I like the first 3 chapters I will definitely keep reading keep up the good work I don’t know why I thought it was going to be first person but it’s all good still😅

The writting could be better I feel and better prose but everything else is interesting like the characters. I’m sure though as you go on it will become even better it’s only 9 chapters so I know it will get better keep it up