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This is really beautiful novel,good job author.Great background,great characters and stuff.I really love development things.Side characters is really humanly,you feel them.After 150 chapter i'm not confused,he creating tanks or some helicopters.Maybe we see new continents

Hello, I'm reading your book and I really don't feel connected to your main character. Who is the main character, and is he reincarnated or something? Does he have a system? The story goes so fast that I can't create connections. I mean, the dude is talking to girls, maybe you should create the girls' inner voices more. And you should create a background. I mean, your character goes to the beach. What properties does the beach have, or what is the current weather? What color are the girls' bikinis—pink, red, or something else? Are there many people? Little details add life to the story. So, you should create more background details of the environment. You should provide more knowledge about your character to create empathy. And you should create more inner voices and more details about people for connections. When you make transitions, add more detail. And your character development is not fine. You are creating a character who is a genius, who thinks "I don't need school, f*ck society." You should add more details about why Ryan thinks like that, which books or experiences lead Ryan to think like that. Again, it's a detail issue. I hope you understand, my English is not good.