DaGoat

TFTC !

It’s kind of my first story that I wrote seriously, and I appreciate very much these advices, I’ll try to improve my writing skills.

For my defense, the characters are 16, so of course they won’t talk like adults…

he is mostly here to help MC in his childhood, other than that he is just chilling on a boat, fishing…

I appreciate it a lot, thank you ! Also, about the Grandpa, he isn’t that much relevant in the story, I just brought him with the MC so that his childhood would be smoother and because he never had the chance to say goodbye. You should try to give it another chance, anyway, I really appreciate the review 🫶