Abr_Lok

Honestly, it started well, but blind use of AI kinda killed it I always always like and want to read stories in which Superheroes do more things, other than just going around in color costume. This was shaping into a fic like that, you should honestly have made him meta-blind, but put in the trait that he trusts noone(side effect from being in abyss and then his mum's death), and then you can make him as edgy as you want. His future knowledge, but trying to bumblingily accomodate canon makes it hard to read imo.

While it is very interesting to read, continuity is very very bad or maybe just a Out of Context AI. Is Tony dreamin' of knowing Yinsen even before getting kidnapped...

While all is fine, the story is kinda boring IMO.... There is no hook to hook me I liked the premise geuinely, usually authors make there SI mold into Viltrum personality instead of the opposite... Which was a good hook in this story Then honestly nothing came of it, I would have preferred if he just landed in an empty field(I know not easy, but still somehow, you know timing his landing during invasion or something) and then made up his own mind So, while this story doesn't have SI turning native to Viltrum problem( so far).... It has a even bigger problem THE SIGMA BATMAN You know how people don't like Superman because he is basically Gary Sue and hard to write struggling without magic rocks..... Well Batman is not far off...

There is potential.... But this is another cookie cutter episode of your future path in now my stomping ground.... I mean...think about it....WTH has he done since 10.... Other than waiting to follow on his weak sickly brother's coat-tails

1. Mountain battle... Why fight on his terms when all the advantages are on MCs side... Just to make sure it is not easy... Get MC's head smashed so that he is out of picture... 2. Why not divide the people and make sure some goes to protect Lyanna.... Again with Crossbows to remove any Kingsguard shaped problems...

I can honestly see this in my head Mr. Stark, You can't use Ironman as ur superhero name... It is copyrighted under Cavill Productions.... Also, not for sale at any price Avengers before Fury even got the idea Captain America: Thank God, my name was coined in 1940s

Meh... While interesting.... It's too a + b = c kinda story The intrigue is very over the top.... Not to mention plot holes everywhere... Sigh... Let me spell it out CROSSBOW x 10 = Author not creating plotholes...

Yep... I am done... I just can't read past Pakistani Super heroine... In 1948(you know.... 1 year past colonial rule)... 😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂....in Pakistan.... 😂😂😂😂.... How did she made past her tweens... Fck all man... You had to make a good starting fic into this Shit Show

Ha Ha Ha. I can't read this... Even objectively.... I m dying with laughter Pakistani female superhero.... WAKE UP TO REALITY.... If that lady made way past her tweens... then Author is a god... 😂😂😂😂😂

Connection is fine... But when they start overlapping then it becomes kinda hard to follow .... Especially if all that start happening from the start without fleshing out the character properly