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all authors who want to write a story about show business should first read the novel "The Best Director". Then you can start writing something of your own.

the author writes (but it is clear that AI does not only edit). The author is very bad at showing that the characters are children. Even if they are smarter than their age, they are still children. You had to show it, you need details, you need actions. There are many examples in both fiction books and movies, use them. If you change the age of the characters, make them older, there is no difference. :(

What a ridiculous name..

He said it wasn't a translation, but your synopsis screams: "TRANSFER". Why the f*** should add these stupid dialogues to the synopsis? It looks stupid, don't you understand?

So the chronology is written quite normally and clearly on one of the sites, besides it is accurate. You have some characters here who are several, or even dozens of years older.

Stop making the MC shake because of her strength, it's annoying.

It would have been worth moistening this story with saliva, Maybe then it would not have been so dry.

He finally has parents, a second chance at a more or less normal life, but no, he was an idiot, and he stayed.

Here he is, the future rapist and murderer.

It's better to be neutral towards him than friendly or aggressive. It's better to show that you're not his enemy than to try to befriend him, because that doesn't seem like Malfoy. It would be much more interesting.