Killerpanda124

That is a great idea thank you for it

That’s fair. I can see why it felt that way if you expected the story to return to Naruto much sooner. The Star Wars arc was meant to build Ren’s experience, allies, and future impact on Konoha rather than just be a quick power grab. But I understand that the pacing may not work for everyone, especially if they wanted the Senju and Naruto side to stay front and center earlier.

Thanks for giving it a try and for being honest about why you dropped it. I can understand where you’re coming from, especially with the Star Wars arc feeling too long if you were mainly reading for the Naruto side of the story. That said, some of those choices were intentional. Ren is not meant to be an overpowered mastermind who instantly knows how to handle everything. He has future knowledge, but he is still physically and emotionally a kid. He has memories from another life, but he is not supposed to act like a perfect adult in a child’s body. That is why Tobirama corrects him so much. Tobirama is one of the smartest and most experienced shinobi alive, so Ren needing guidance from him is meant to keep Ren grounded instead of making him unrealistically competent. The long Star Wars section was also meant to be more than just “get a lightsaber and leave.” It was supposed to give Ren experience, allies, technology, trauma, training, and a different worldview before returning to Naruto. I do understand, though, that if someone wanted the story to stay mostly in the Naruto world early on, that arc could definitely feel too long. As for people knowing about his powers, I get why that trope can bother people. In this story, I wanted to avoid the usual “MC hides everything forever while everyone around him acts blind” setup. With people like Tobirama, Hashirama, and Mito around him, it would feel forced to me if Ren could keep everything secret for long. I wanted the tension to come less from hiding his abilities and more from how the family and village handle those abilities responsibly. So I understand your criticism, and the story may just not be paced in a way that works for you. But Ren being corrected, not being instantly powerful, and relying on adults around him is part of the point. He is a kid with future knowledge, not a god pretending to be a kid.

Yes it is a her I gender bent him it is an AU

Because I have plans for them

Think of the armor on Ren and Tobirama

Thanks that means a lot

Are you being sarcastic or are you serious I’m want to know so I know if I need to improve

Besides I always thought jreya and her would make an interesting couple or orocemare god I no that is not even close to his name I usual have the names on a word document so I don’t misspell the names

Love the story the only downside is I wish the chapters were longer but I understand why they are so short