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I mean it’s my hero academia it’s logic is questionable at best I mean there a guy who’s litterly a spray bottle so putting out a super nova? I feel like someone has the power to do that

The premise of being reincarnated as Spider-Man is definitely interesting, but I feel like the story stumbles in its execution. One thing that stood out (in a bad way) was how often the author compares this Spider-Man to other versions, particularly Tobey Maguire’s. It feels unnecessary to keep putting down one version to prop up another—especially when it doesn’t add anything to the story. Another thing that bugged me was how the MC goes from being so depressed that they end their life to suddenly being cheerful and carefree after reincarnating. I get that becoming Spider-Man would be a big deal, but the shift feels too abrupt and unrealistic. It’s like the story doesn’t want to explore the MC’s struggles in any meaningful way—it’s just there for a dramatic backstory. And then there’s this weird amount of focus on the looks of female characters. Aunt May is called a “hot MILF,” and the MC spends time talking about how Zendaya’s MJ is hotter than Liz from Homecoming. It feels out of place and kind of immature. Instead of adding to the story, it just pulls me out of it. Overall, while the idea behind the story has a lot of potential, I feel like it’s weighed down by unnecessary comparisons, tonal inconsistencies, and shallow moments that don’t do justice to the concept.

Greatly improved I’m not going to lie I’m super impressed with the story so far it’s starts of okay but later in the story it looks good great work improvement with the story

Your welcome and I hope you continue this story is not bad and I do hope you imporve and make a good story