Skordex_Night

why do the killers enslave them when it rains?

He can literally grow them according to his mood; he doesn't need to be stuck at that level! And he could integrate himself among them thus increasing the number of these men! Don’t forget that there is also the danger of mountain men! The ark! The demons!

otsutsuki, ninjutsu, byakugan, island of karma and now an AI integrated into the island? Soon Kyubi or an alien ship in ruins? He will discover something new in each situation or how does it work? Development is seriously killing me yet you apply regularly.

your guy has literally just become the reincarnation of a scientist and a ninja from naruto's hyagua clan! By the way, you explain how he has the bakuya even though he is from the Shen clan?! being honest you write well even if a lot is integrated but the development is lousy!

a lot of useless chatter. The MC has no knowledge of the stories but acts as if he was aware of it. he has an asset but concretely it does not explain his behavior or his knowledge on elements such as cultivation. the author could have just added a prophetic gift to this level

Pokémon ? he can create a cheater magic from 300 lp which allows him to create living beings and all that he could imagine is to create pokemons? seriously ? you should have given him a pokemon gacha system at this level! and other things when does he know what the magic seal of the zaunes looks like? let's imagine he knew it, there would also be a DNA test!

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Tu est Désespérant !

Le concepte de ´a fanifiction semble interessante au premiers chapitre même si j’ai remarqué que c’était un peu raté sur la conception du système avec un espace de stockage et une classe de magie mais à la fin du deuxième j’ai compris que le dérapage furieux avait commencé alors qu’il laisse octavia sauté dans l’eau en connaissant l’intrigue avant de montré son système au calme et puis sauter dans l’eau face un putain de monstre qui aurait du le massacre. Au troisième chapitre j’ai totalement abandonné en voyant le mc tuer le serpent en l’étranglant comme hulke puis raconte qu’il est le descendant de Artur Pendragon et que la magie existe .[img=disgusted][img=nervous]

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