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Like the first comment said , it has nice slow pace but the issue with that is that it tends to become more Western Novel-like instead of it being a "Webnovel". It's good and you'll defintely find your audience but keep in mind that the most popular novels out there are fast paced or are unique.
Great start. Just keep it up. Writing is good too.
Nice. Really good
Paragraph spacing is important to keep the flow of your novel consistent. There are too many sentences in your paragraphs so it's like a huge chunk and really slows down the pacing. Try to break up them into smaller paragraphs. Other than that's it's pretty good .
Now that I've read both chapters. I find the writing lacking maturity. It's awkward but it has potential. It's an original story but has preexisting elements that make it easy to grasp. The writing style needs to improve and I'm sure you'll do well. Just keep practicing and reading.
Solid start. Although I think it's missing something to capture the reader's attention .
Thank You so much. I appreciate the comment.
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Heya this is SoronousWorks. Shout Out . Really cool Novel here. Keep it up. I'll be keeping watch.