MarcelloAlvarez

.......bro...Poor sylvia.....I can feel it, I can feel it. my ultra instinct is screaming.......Leo will cause trouble.

You said you need advice on how to write romance.... As someone who has always read romance literature from classic to modern (I mean, I read anything as long as it's a literary piece), my tips would be: never say what they feel, like 'I'm so in love with you,' but describe it through actions and feelings. For example, describe how they felt their palms sweating, an anxious thought, a restlessness, or feeling a pang of jealousy. Don't use pick-up lines. Also, when you want to say pick-up lines or feelings like 'I love you,' make sure to describe what they feel first to build it up before saying the words. Another thing: action is very important. How he reacts differently with her and thinks differently with her should make their connection feel special and unique to each other. What they feel is unique to each other, a feeling they could never feel with another unless it's between them.

I apologize for the typographic errors, author.

I disagree. honestly isn't the elf dude more talented? bro literally is a origin rank and the guy has time manipulation....it also doesn't help that his introduction was basically glazing like he's gojo or something. So I don't think your right there are more better rivals than this generic ahhh.

Look they are not that bad. but they are just generic. that's it, generic. Besides I don't think you can blame 10 years old for acting that way. it's not Arthur or Amelia's fault; that's not their responsibility. But how did Leo's parents not expected that to happened? they didn't do anything? maybe they did but I couldn't really see the effort. Shouldn't they be able to understand? Imagine being born with B rank core in a family who's immensely talented and every important member thinks that you're a mistake? also Arthur and Amelia just feel like a carboard.

Yeh, I know dude. just feel inspired in certain ways.

I'm not sure okay, sometimes humans pick patterns when there is not.

Author, I'm not sure if I'm picking up wrong signals here. but is the mc inspired from Devil may cry Vergil? his character screams vergil. the white hair and blue eyes. the soul flames (Vergil demonic character). also the spacial manipulation? katana expert? and how Vergil move fast? the cold smirk? that aura feels like vergil. ESPECIALLY THE PERSONALITY IF YOU EXCLUDE THE SELF PITY. Grumpy, Cold, Stoic, dry sarcastic arrogant humour. and that COLD SMIRK, I saw Vergil in my mind.

I MEAN WHITE HAIR AND BLUE EYES. (TYPO)

THAT COLD SMIRK TOO.