descriptive, emotive language that can improve connections with readers would be good. dont be shy to experiment with comedy other than romance, it lightens the mood well. i think it can go well just need more time for it to grow

descriptive words could be used more, in my opinion, I think emotive language furthers a better connection with the reader so try focus on that. take your time to practice and further it, experiment with different ideas.

I understand what you mean about it. Apollo was surprised because not many shops are targeted in the galactic drug trade. And yeah he does have a mental illness. Let me know if you have any questions hope this helped

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Decent comedy, good pacing just need to flesh the story out more with imagery

good adding comedy, transitioning between chapters have been improved upon. well done!

good having the flashback, but would like a little more clarity on the chapters (however its early days)

explores the different side of their version of humanity which is good!

use descriptive words more to paint a picture, words indicating speech and " would be better. but overall its an alright chapter, it gets you introduced to it decently

thank you, will keep publishing this!

thank you!

make sure that you direct the story more clear (whether it be story-telling, grammar, etc). make it more descriptive and emotive for the reader. indicate the flashback and how they think to themselves. if it was more clear, it would have been a better intro

just make sure that emotive language is more used to connect your readers to the story more. i think stephan should have more interactions to build up this feeling

cool! pretty unique but also very easy to get a hold of, more world building would be good to develop in the coming chapters

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I like the story, I think it has good characters that were introduced well. It has good fights, good dialogue, good comedy in certain moments that kind of removes the tension a little.

hi! welcome this is my first main project, hope you enjoy it!