Muichiro_tokito_9310

Is this a harem, if yes then I'll give it a try, if not, then I don't bother reading even if it's a good story. Because for me a good story is a one, which is good even when it has a big harem and all of them are given enough importance in the story.

What's the point of her being in the plot? I mean it's one thing if she's a harem mate. But if that isn't the case, then her being in the plot is completely irrelevant and unnecessary. She'll probably move out with her boyfriend at some point in time. So I don't get what's up with all this useless interaction. You should spend more time developing his relationships with the harem Mates

Hey author, simple question,give me yes or no:- Is Lily a harem mate or not.

Will Lily take MC's willy? Or will she find someone else, if yes then this is NTR. So I don't need to read this story no matter how good it might be. Tell me beforehand

But our player is Broken😌. So he's meant to break rules

hey dumb author. I just read the chapter named "Fierce mother". I'd like to give you genuine advice, write a story where you are able to convey your ideas correctly and ask someone to read your chapters before posting them. The reason I am saying this is because, your dumbass made Draven the villain, when in fact what he said was absolutely correct. Draven as any other parent was concerned about how his sheltered son can have such viciousness, especially when it's supposed to be his first fight. There's nothing wrong in him killing those bandits, but the way he malicious tortured them, with absolute brutality, any sane parent will be concerned about how can thier child who never faced any hardship have such nasty side And yet you made him the villain just to make Aria separate from him. Instead of doing such a shitty job of making a wedge between Aria and Draven, you could have learnt something from Victor, from my three beautiful vampire wives. You could have simply had them separate due to their spark dying down, instead of making Draven the villain. Not only that ,when someone points out any genuine fault in your story, you still have the audacity to give sassy replies. So for that fuck you. .

Dafuck. You idiot author. This bastard MC is sleeping with Nyx and enjoying touching her beautiful body so much that he'd rather simp NYX's body , than for Margaret who's actually doing so much for him. I understand that you want to make Nyx the main girl, but she didn't do shit when you compare her to Margaret, for Arthur to lover her more Margaret. Unlike the succubus in your other novel, where she was with him right from the beginning and gave him support and strength and taught him how to become strong, him loving her more is understandable. So stop being so cocky as if you are some kind of Saint. Your writing here clearly potrays Arthur as a simp. Just because you don't feel the same, doesn't mean that the readers can't see it.