MR_Ethan
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MR_Ethan12dCommentedWhere did the mother come from? Is she the girl? I thought the girl spoke about their mother
"Look how much you've grown. I am so proud of you two. I can't believe that it has already been 16 years. It feels like it was just yesterday when my two joys came into this world. I remember your father and I, giving you two your names." Their mother said to them. Her eyes watering a bit.- MR_Ethan12dCommented
Whispered to himself? Or under his breath? Isn’t he trying to speak to the little gally
"Can you really not see them, those lights constantly flowing all around us." Liam whispered to himself, as he realized that he had dozed of yet again. "I really need to control that" - MR_Ethan12dCommented
What’s ‘him coming to his senses’ look like? Eyes bulging? Heart racing? Dissociation?
"huh?" said Liam, returning to his senses. - MR_Ethan12dCommented
Very magical simile.
"Like a ballroom of fairies. Flowing and dancing all around me." - MR_Ethan1mthCommentedCh 2 Chapter 2: Vengeance