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you know Deep has a tracking chip?

There's a difference between underestimating yourself and denying actions you've already taken. Deku worries about not meeting expectations or being strong enough, but that doesn't apply here because he's questioning whether he would do something he's already done.

I'm sorry, friend, but I'm not convinced. That's not pragmatism, it's cynicism, because if he were pragmatic, he would know the answer is yes, because he's already done it.

What do you mean he doesn't know if he'd jump in to save someone? Did you forget Eri's whole arc or what? Bad chapter.

I've been really bothered by the way everyone interacts; they seem like a parody of their anime character stereotypes. Not to mention, they all seem to be following a script, and I noticed it especially during the USJ arc where everyone just lets the protagonist leave like that. Sorry, but no matter how strong the protagonist has been, I don't see the characters letting him go, at least not like that. This is just my opinion, but anyway, TFTC.

I prefer the other version, but this one is still good. My only issue is the overuse of comedy, like the doctors making jokes or when he had his counseling; it seems more inappropriate than funny. To sum it up, everything has its time and place, keep that in mind, and good job.

You have a very distorted view of the characters, and the Tyrells supported Renly because he married Margery. It doesn't make sense to offer Margery's hand in marriage to the North, and how did the news travel so quickly?

"Hear my roar" is the Lannister motto

Why would Arya know that all Baratheons have black hair? Ned knows it from the book of the great houses, and considering that only Jon and Arya have Stark features, it shouldn't be a trait that would give her away.