Wildegarden

it's a week for coincidences then, as I found this book on RR as I was googling it for webnovel pc. Is that you? or is it someone taking the free copies from here and copying it? If it is you, is the new novel going to be here or there? I also left a review for the book, I rarely write one but I really loved this book!

Shops ruin a good story always, as it's just a deux ex machina for the protagonist and ruins an otherwise good natural progression for the MC what's the point is trying to struggle when you can just buy your way to victory, I'm way less interested in the story now

I wanted to perhaps give my opinion on this, it would be better imo if you removed the | and made each line of the status start and end in a square bracket or remove the brackets and the | altogether the | makes its visually jarring ( at least for me) and makes it feel like the whole thing is a run on sentence and hard to focus on a specific line. for eg- Novice|Spells is a visually jarring way to represent novice spells as it's much cleaner to just say Spellcasting: Novice Spells: Just my opinion, it's readable either way but this way is just little to visually noisy for me

I highly recommend this story to interested readers. it's very well written, the author writes in a way that helps in visualising what is on screen to the reader, there are almost no grammaitical or spelling errors and the story develeopment is crisp and sharp, no excessive bloat or repeated paragraphs trusting the intellignence of the reader to remember past details The protagonist is complex and dark but not comically edgy, his aspirations and goals (so far) are pretty clear and makes sense for him as a character. The early villain (so far) is 'little' cliche, but are effective enough (and despicable enough) as perhaps the first obstacle for our hero as there are hints of a greater threat behind the scenes the world building we've seen so far is interesting, the monsters are a mixture of unique (Like a gigantic bear covered in iron plates that gets stronger as the plates heat up) and familiar (like good old Liches). I've asked a good bit of questions in the comments, I was so invested in the lore The only nitpick I WILL give is, the larger world seems to be on pause atm. We (or rather the hero) never hear about happenings in the other nations and their opinions of our actions or them taking some action or furthering some goal on their own accord, we know they exist but after their introduction, they are absent in the setting.It makes the world seems a little small and still, some little tidbits like a town crier shouting some news about the other kingdoms that the hero overhears passing by or something like that would make the world feel a little more alive. Over all, a great book that I cannot read fast enough!!!!

I understand, I'll continue with the book and give my opinions in the future. As for Idan, I want to clarify my position on him and provide an example of how I feel a young man would react to something. I don't want him to fight Irene all the time, that childish and stupid But, in the scene after the dance. Irene pretty forcefully and rudely asks him to explain to her what's going on, as a man who has barely seen her after she became famous and after Irene has not told him ANYTHING about her job and systems and barely talks to him at all His reaction should not be, "I'll tell you later", it should be "Let me handle it" or "I don't have to tell you anything" and if it has to be "I'll tell you later" then at least he should acknowledge that Irene is being rude to him and has no right to ask him about his problem. That adds some drama to their relationship, as the brother in Irene's shadow Hope that clears it up, Thanks for being so patient 😄

I hope you don't mind one last question. If there are gods, is there a god of death/Underworld? I ask become whoever the goddess was who Kai meets earlier. It's weird that she has dominion over Kai without angering the god of death (if they exist) who feels like would be his patron god

You're telling me the grammar gets better in the future chapters? Because while I do like the story (not a big fan of the male protagonist, seems like a pushover in regards to his sister as he just does whatever she says with no pushback, Hope that changes too. The female protagonist is cool tho) the grammar is the biggest hurdle for me so far

Author, this one i believe is also an error on the summary of your book. I suggest at least correcting that ASAP

Author, how much later is the romance gonna be in the story? and how much of the story will be romance focused? I personally prefer a healthy dose of romance (as long as it doesn't overshadow the story but rather enhances it and drives it forward)