ATriste

Shameless author 5-star review because f*ck yea I love my story! If you're following along and enjoying the story please leave some comments and reviews. I love to hear what you guys think about the story, it makes my day. Also, keep the power stones coming [img=update]! Love you all!

A nicely orchestrated romance in a high fantasy realm. Well, there's nothing quite like young love in an interesting setting and with an unusual twist. The main character seems to be finding herself and potentially she may be coming to understand her feelings for a few people in the future. The author has painted a very vivid picture of the aristocratic world that is being introduced. That being said, there were a few grammatical mistakes, especially in the earlier chapters; so, I'd recommend the author give the work a fresh read-through to touch them up. Still, this has all the right fixings for an interesting romance tale. I'd recommend it, keep up the good work!

Perhaps, you could break this paragraph up into a few more. So far, your prose is good, and the story is entertaining.

Wow okay, quite the ride. This story's world is pretty interesting, especially with the latest chapter's development. A very different and very cool take on the use of systems in a novel. I like it, it will lead to a lot of new development for the genre. There are some definite grammar and punctuation errors, and some parts seem slightly rushed, but with polish, I think this story has a lot of potential (story essence is far more important than technique that can still be refined). I can nitpick a few other things, but in the end, it's the author's story to tell, and they seem quite capable of telling a good one. Good luck, and I look forward to future updates.

Kind of an abrupt transition. Maybe just add a little more detail to this reawakening so it's more obvious what's occurred to the reader.

Thank you for catching this! I've corrected the error.

Alright, so the stability of updates could use a bit of work, but I'm guessing this is a work in progress. The premise of this story is really quite good though, I hope Rerian tries to develop this story more because I'm actually interested to see what happens next despite there only being a couple of chapters. There are some grammar and punctuation errors, but nothing so major that it makes the story hard to read. I personally think the story should stay in the first-person perspective, the storyline feels very personal, which I think gives the plot a little something extra. So Rerian if you read this, please keep it 1st person. All-in-all I'd say this will be a really decent read once more chapters come out. Sirius is a very likable and relatable main character and the first chapter is pretty compelling for an introduction. Good job!

Capitalize 'some' and 'which' in the following line. The prose are good though.