Yadoley
I love systems for creating games or broadcasts, let the poor unemployed person read a novel with live broadcasts when you don’t have to wait 50 days to unlock 50 chapters :<
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If I could create something myself, I would add all the best from other works, but to be honest, everything that the different authors of these works have done is simply amazing from my point of view, it’s just that your story starts more with a serious topic and funny things, It’s as if there’s not enough of a third element to soften or balance it out by adding somewhere at the beginning something interesting or something romanticized to give the hormones interest, you know how to make a harem with sex, it seems like you’re kind of tired of it, but you can always come back to relax, mb just That’s how it is for me, but in your story I would like to add at the very beginning that he moved from another world or something like that and that he will live with her, but to be honest this is more of a parody of what I read in the manga, there was a story about a guy who found a girl from the past (some year 800) and took her in, at first she was afraid, but the longer they were together and she learned from him, the faster they began to meet, she was so cute, like a cat, supposedly not slutty and it turned out very cool, sorry if I wrote it in a boring way)) I just thought I’d add something of my own, maybe you’ll take note of something, by the way, if you have time, take a look at fanfic Marvel with a game creation system, maybe you can take note of something from there, there are just some points there where it is very interesting to read ♡♡
Hello, thank you very much that you will continue to do this despite the fact that you were a little late to start on time, to be honest, I would add more cute things to your story like jokes, a date or young masters who are messing with his girlfriend and how he is with them straighten out during dates, the main thing is not to focus on them, as if they are nobody in their eyes, I would also add some kind of joke somewhere in the middle of the story that in the future they will be able to get a system of joint travel or something like that, where they should help different worlds, exclude anomalies such as regressors or migrants, although it would be better to add something else for them other than what I said, I just added something similar based on my favorite works, but in any case I respect your taste, I’m just a little tired of all sorts of systems of divine swords or masters of one finger press where the entire universe is in front of him)
The beginning looks presentable to me and I hope it will remain so in the future, I don’t know about everyone else, but I miss the call and conclusion of a contract like between a man and a dragon, imagine the joke, I don’t remember anything like that, so it doesn’t turn out that one sleeps all the time, and the other complains about its uselessness and doesn’t know what he's like the coolest ♡♡♡♡