Cursed_w0lf4

Fully aware but it's just like one of those thoughts in your head which seem like you are overusing one idea.

read the title fucking idiot

Writing Quality: 🌟(1/5) Story Development: 🌟🌟(2/5) Update Stability: 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟(5/5) World Background: 🌟(1/5) The grammar and spelling could really do some work. At first it wasn't really that noticeable but later on it went up from a few mistakes to the inability to read. The story is so bad the MC has to do military training even though he has a technology system. Also the MC is extremely stupid at points and is starting to get annoying. You do get a few points for the Sun Tzu shout outs.

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Scratch my previous comment this MC is a bum

The readers a re the dumb people he is saying how on earth the professor has so much power not who he is

I'll start of with something positive. - The character design is really creative and realistic it nearly perfectly portrays the characters that are set. I just love that about the fic. - The grammar is noticeable better than the average slop a random like this author would post. His writing has surpassed my expectations when I saw this fic. - Storyline has a good baseline and plot. Pretty solid and can probably make the fic last 50-100 chapters if the author pushes it. - I also like the story it's been quite a cinematic experience if I must say. Now the negative. - While the format of speech is nice I find it highly ineffective. You cannot tell what the character is feeling unless you really focus. I would suggest moving to " so that you are able to create a better reader friendly experience. - I would like for less speech. I feel like every movement he takes is either described by someone else or himself. - Improve the descriptive writing please, not enough being said there this links to my point above. I would also like some thoughts of Koji occasionally(ones he doesn't voice). - Also because you are a new writer I think. It's not the easiest to read. You might need to take some pointers from a few sources. if you are wondering whether or not to read this book then I would recommend it to those who aren't to bothered by a different way of writing. It is a bit fast paced but nothing that is detrimental towards the story and has decent grammar. But just lacks that flow that you see in experienced writers. Writing Quality: 🌟🌟🌟 Story development: 🌟🌟🌟 Character design: 🌟🌟 Update stability(as of now): 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟 World Background: 🌟🌟 Rating of 2.8/5

cooked. I proofread it but there is still a spelling mistake.Thanks so much for pointing it out. I think it is because I write from my phone for half the chapter then finish on pc or still mobile sometimes.

To be honest I feel like you are treating Izan like some fragile kid, take Lamine Yamal from Spain he started basically every game for his nation team in the euros(similar age). I can get the coach thinking he is young but one game started is just frustrating. Imagine trying your best in training and being the best but all of this is stopped because you are young.

The glaze is unreal