I like your writing quality and your use of adjectives to describe characters, I also like how you're doing 10 chapters a week which is more than I've done so far, my goal is to be able to average similar numbers. The story is developing very nicely so far, slow down the world-building. I need a lot more details on character backgrounds and everything else. overall your book is good but its lacking in certain things that I know you can change and improve I hope you get more views and readers.

Yeah honestly with all the details you pointed out, I'm kind of at a stump with this, I'm planning on doing some more research and hopefully finding a way to improve the earlier chapters and take my time, the reason the chapters came out so short is that I was planning on releasing chapters every week but now I can tell that if I want my story to be good, I'm gonna have to slow down on publishing and improve on those first chapters.

I was planning on using pieces and information like this to fit into the bigger puzzle that shows as the story continues.

Yeah I could have taken so more time to build trust between them before jumping into the usual teasing cliche so early on.

Yeah I had a rough time trying to think of a good way to start my prologue, I'm hoping that soon especially with the later chapters Ill be able to better explain and build the Main leads up to characters people would love and connect with, thank you again.

Thank you for the review man, I was planning on revealing more through the progression of the story while having the puzzle pieces click together I learned this through Agatha Christie who does mystery novels.

cant wait to see how the story progresses on

Hey Eridna thanks for the comment, what do you think I can do to make my story better, get back to me when you can thanks.