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Accidentally deleted my comment. "But they are not Grim Reapers. are they? I remember in chapter 2, Roxina said she's not a soul reaper."
Highly recommended! But here's some things that I find so far: * Despite minor errors that may have been overlooked, the overall writing remains polished and engaging. Great job! * Some readers (or maybe just me) may find the story development to be slower than expected for an action-fantasy novel. It takes several chapters just for the soul turfing alone. * Character design is actually good, with vivid descriptions allowing readers (or maybe just me, 'cause I have been reading fantasy novels for a long time already) to easily envision the appearance and personalities of the characters--personally like seven lords' outfit. You can add more small details though, but overall its good. * I find the world-building to be lacking in clarity, considering the story development is a bit slower. Well, too early to judge. Good thing, in Chapter 12, world building took few steps. Overall, I loved it. Highly recommend. Good job.
You forgot the quotation mark here.
Really? If I were Arex, I would probably think that she's a grim reaper, like for real. XD
"...with your wisteria." I think this should be "...with you, Wisteria."
You probably just overlooked it, but that's it. Also, I don't know where to comment for general remarks, but I think there's too much paragraph. Some can be just part of a previous one instead of creating a new line for it. Sorry, is it a thing in webnovel?
There's an unnecessary " (an open quote) in this part. It should be "Black parade? Wisteria? *the rest of the dialoge.* ..."