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noob_slayer_52394mthCommentedNaw the clown fit is the best
So, our dear little Angelina has found herself on the path to marriage with a wicked man but will her efforts to avoid the engagement save her or make the prince want her more? But more importantly, Angelina has another mission. TO STOP HER MOTHER FROM MAKING HER LOOK LIKE A CLOWN!- noob_slayer_52394mthPosted
The writing quality is not that good, there is something missing, a quality which i can't really describe. (Im not a writer) Anyway if we forget some grammatical errors it isnt bad just... plain. The story is intresting and the world and setting is really intriguing, but the execution is bad, the setting is never really explained while this can be good, in this case it just make the reader confused. Things are repeated several times without giving any depht so it just feel like it is drawn out. The characters are kinda intresting but again the execution of them are unatural, feelings and emotions seems forced. Im not an expert but thisi is the impression i have gotten. My advice for the author is to have the story more concise and to explain more things, im not sure but i think you tried to have it explained through character interactions but if thats the case it wasnt really clear.
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wait is this supposed to be walking??? why not just do step... step...step?
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Monte cristo lol
She ended up getting pregnant and birthed a healthy male. The villain Melia Vint Leigh Montecristo was 5 at the time. Her mother and father were deeply in love with each other but when her father had sex with the she devil it drove a wedge between them. Melia's mother was a sickly woman and naturally couldn't handle the drama. - noob_slayer_52394mthCommented
For some reason i predicted this. There was a foreboading tone althorugh the beginning
That day, the happiness in Emilia's chest was boundless. So boundless, in fact, that it really couldn't be contained anymore. It escaped along with her bright red blood, leaving her with only emptiness and despair in her now pierced heart.