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Sure, I'll do it without any problem! And as a reader, if you don't mind, I'd recommend giving the protagonist a bit more depth. For example, you could better define his goals, his past, and the reasoning behind his actions to try and make him a three-dimensional character. Of course, you don't have to overdo it, but I’d love to see him evolve as the story progresses
At least try to hide it a little, the explanations feel way too convenient for the family
I'm reading this with my brain half turned off, and it still almost shut down the other half.
From your perspective it might seem obvious, but that is never actually stated in the fanfic, and the MC didn't even try to reason it out or think it through. He just picked the gauntlet almost instantly without a second thought. I'm not saying it's a bad choice, just that it was executed really poorly.
Even though I understand your reasoning for doing all that with the protagonist, I still see no point in him putting so much weight on what Xiaogang says, when he could have easily gotten out of all that just by playing dumb. It seems really stupid to me. He literally turned into a cheap Chinese MC out of nowhere lol.
To be honest, I think you should go back and change the previous chapter. Modify the apple part by swapping it for a much weaker item, or something that actually makes the MC debate what to choose. Because literally no one in their right mind would do what the MC just did. And I get that you intended for this to happen from the very beginning, but the way he chose it feels way too forced
Let me get this straight, author... You're telling me the protagonist chose the damaged gauntlet over the golden apple? After literally just reading about the massive difference between them?
my opinion, the best thing would be to use the second martial soul on the spatial ring or on a character.
It would be really cool if the protagonist went down the resource production path, since he's going to need them in increasingly larger quantities the more his strength grows. He could set up his own industrial farming zone using the knowledge of how to make fertilizer