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Alex_Moon_90343hCommentedBro basically became anos voldigoad, all for one, and Darwin
[The last two abilities are inspired from Hector from "Meta essence gacha in marvel" one of my favorites fanfics]- Alex_Moon_903412hCommentedThe formation of a clan cannot be achieved by a man marrying one woman and having only one child. It was acknowledged that Kazutora would have to strive diligently in the future because re-establishing a clan with a single offspring is unfeasible.
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Kazutora looked at the scene with a smile on his face and he felt that he had completed one of the goals that all transmigrators have, i.e., kill Danzo. - Alex_Moon_903413hCommented
Sword techniques, kenjutsu, or swordplay. All work here
As time passed, she got to know that Kazutora was multi-talented, especially in sword technique, so she taught him more things. Moreover, she also benefitted from the ideas he had in his mind, and they practised together. - Alex_Moon_903413hCommented
His body*
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The first part of konoha’s hokage makes sense the other half is messy. I think saying “, but konoha is not the Hokage’s.”
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“The reaction” isn’t quite right. Try something else. Try something like “state, position, or something like that”
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Nah bro I’d say to hell with Hiruzen right there. She would have no penalties for her actions and the fall out would be completely on Hiruzen.
She could see that her grandfather's cells were used in making the arm, and before Hiruzen could stop her, Tsunade tore off the arm from Danzo's hand. - Alex_Moon_903413hCommented
Have instead use will or would
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Danger*
This paragraph has been deleted. - Alex_Moon_903413hCommented"It was Izumi's," She said and Izumi looked at her with a betrayed look on her face.
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I’m so confused you’ve said “the clan” multiple times so I’m not sure if you’re not noticing or just trying to annoy me
"And seduce you to Hyuga clan." - Alex_Moon_903413hCommented"Eh? Hmm," Hina's expression changed at his words and then she nodded at him.
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The hyuga*
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The old man*
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The dean of the orphanage
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The dean of the orphanage*
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Either “know more about it than I do” or “you’re more aware of it that I am.”
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Charmander is the best short term choice. Squirtle is the best long term choice. Bulbasuar is limited in move pool and tm choice.
"Meh, at least should have kept a flying Pokemon. The HM fly later is quite useful in this gym. I don't understand what's good with Squirtle. Charmander is the best starter in Kanto and even Bulbasaur is good because of 'Leech Seed'." - Alex_Moon_903414hCommented
Teachers*
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