Brocade_Dust

I thought it was a new chap lol. Go on with the tour.

Rest well bro

Two chapssss let's gooooooo

I'm graduating and only had free time now and suddenly you say this 😭 Please don't drop this book. It's rare to see a fanfic with a serious plot, no harem, no romance, and all not having a perverted MC. Although your writing style is a bit too formal and stiff like a summary, I enjoyed reading it nonetheless because it's got some plot going around here and not just a mindless OP to the top. I'm looking forward to seeing your writing improve and be more natural when it comes to conversation in the future. Your works are literally one of my favs out here because it's well written despite its flaws. Keep up, don't give up!

Why is there more and more unnecessary drama. Can't you give more time on the basketball itself, I'm here for it.

I like the story so far, but wished that there would be more action and details in development. I also prefer the way it doesn't follow the plot and the way the author is not afraid of changing some things for the story. It makes it more distinctive from other fics that I've read and makes me really feel that this is a story inside another story. I would like to see more interesting interactions with other characters from HxH and how the story will be ending after altercation. Hope there wouldn't be any awkward romance or harem though cause it just wouldn't make sense in the situation.

Is the sword like the Uniqueness to his pathway?

It's okay. I think you did well on portraying how he dominates the basketball court when he uses his eyes. He's quite playful when playing before and didn't really fit the word conqueror, but he's not using his eyes back then so I think it's still reasonable. I think you just have to make him more dominating and merciless when he uses his Conqueror's Eyes while playing to make it a fitting title. The story is well written though, it's the best KnB fanfic I've read with no romance and harem stuff. It purely focuses on the MC getting stronger and the game. It's very good. You already did great when you decided to change the plot. I was really afraid that you'll follow the plot and lose in front of the power of friendship, but you did well on not making any compromises on that.