KingK9

yea. i realized that right after i finished and published this unfortunately/:

under 5 minutes, crazy work.

please read past the criticisms for my suggestions below (: just 1 star. in the 100 chapters I've read, probably 20 were in the boy's universe. the chapters are so short it takes less than 5 minutes to fully read. this is not a "the boys" fanfiction. it's just another multiversal wish fulfillment story. he sells an additional 12 advanced chapters on his patreon, but if they are the same size as the ones that get uploaded here, it is just not worth it. in the worlds he spends most of his time in, barely nothing happens besides him killing a few things to steal some powers. there's nothing keeping me invested in this story besides watching him slowly get stronger over dozens of chapters. I had such high hopes for this, but it is just annoying and boring to read. i apologize to the author for the bad review, since i know how hard it is to write a good book, but I believe it can get better with time. now that the criticisms are out of the way, I would like to add some suggestions so that i am not just giving the author a bad review. 1) longer chapters. even if it takes longer to update, 1-2 long chapters per week is exponentially better then the current ones, especially if you are selling advanced chapters, a lot more people will be motivated to actually go on your patreon and pay for them. 2) consistency. many people who start reading this do so because of 'The Boys'. there are not a lot of good ones out there, so we are alwys looking for more. spend less time in other worlds amd more in the main universe, or at the very least change the book name so that you dont get spammed with bad reviews. 3) content. instead of focusing mainly on the power ups, focus some more on the relationships surrounding the MC and try thinking up some other things besides jumping from power A to power B. currently it just gets boring quickly and i would find myself skipping 1-2 thirds of the story because it is just the same thing over and over again each chapter. 4) relationship. there are a great many people in 'The Boys' universe and other ones that he may or already have visit, many of which the viewers would be interested in seeing the MC be involved in. you dont have to make explicit scenes, but again, anything to drive the tension up and introduce new things to the story can only make this better. that is all, sorry for the long review, and i hope everyone reads past my initial criticism. this book has potential and i would love to see it flourish.

a thousand years from now, the sabertooth tigers will still be thriving, and they owe it all to this dude lol

why would he be lurking outside the deeps room when he csn just hide in a girls bathroom or something lol

"I Cast, SPLIT ATOM!"

with chapters like this, how can anyone think thats a good idea, 18 chapters will get blown through in 20 minutes and still be in the same scene my guy, come on.

jeez, this book has the pacing of a one piece season lol

An atlatl is an ancient hunting tool that uses leverage to propel a spear or dart at much higher speeds and distances than a human could achieve by throwing by hand. Predating the bow and arrow, it consists of a handheld wooden or bone board with a hook or spur at the rear end to anchor the projectile.

dont worry, he goes back for like 5 chapters around like chapter 30ish lol, then off to another one. its annoying because id like to see him do more in that universe instead of spending the vast majority in other ones, seems like Click bait to me.