Np, your idea is good, you just need to execute it better. also one tip i can give is that once you have finished writing the chapter. copy or cut like 300-400 words of the story and ask GPT to fix grammar and spelling mistakes. this way you can fix any grammatical or spelling mistakes of your entire chapter.

It's aight. Personally the story is going too fast. In three chapters he has escaped a gang, gotten adopted and met the entire family. Also the writing is mid. Writing in first Person works sometimes but this just isn't it. it's written in a weird mix of past tense and present tense. The plot is intreasting. I don't know how or why MC knows about Modren Family. It's probably because I skimmed it. Keep working author but try to make the ploy a little slower. You could have made him escaping the gang into multiple chapter. Yet you finished it in a couple hundred words. Besy of luck author and keep writing to improve :)

This chapter was pretty damn unrealistic. Firstly if I read correctly, Mc put magnets at the bottom of the car and was able to hold his own body weight and not fall down. I'm pretty sure the bottom of a car is also very hot so some minor burns as well. Secondly Police officers do not act like that. From what little shows I've seen ahem (The Rookie) ahem. The first priority is to get the child to saftey and get him to calm down. Also they have no reason to belive him. Anyway I've ranted too much.

Nvm I didn't read the next paragraph I thought he was gonna make a magnet by scratch -_-

Do you even know how to make a magnet? This gang must be filled with cray shi for him to be able to make them.

is their romance? If so who's the FL?

women**

Okay! this my review after reading the first five chapters. Its a good premise, but the writing is pretty bad. Pretty sure author is using ai to fix some mistakes but he should really use grammarly as well. the names get confusing as well, you use little and big george for the two George's but you should use georgie or george jr,also you call memaw as connie which is a little less annoying to read than little and big george but is still annoying nonetheless. The story has potential, you just need to work on writing.

pretty sure its the second dude

No, i just have exams ongoing so I'm not focused on writing

At least read the synopsis correctly 😅😅

Mc and Sophia don't have the same pkweres though? Sophia is talented in charms and can make flanes, while MC has a Transfiguration like ability. I don't know where you see them having the same ability. Anyway I hope you find a story you like :)

Veronica Flaming

Theo Flaming

Sophia Roper

Ophis Malfoy

maybe? maybe not?