Nyx_065

Pathetic

The mc’s anger toward vlad is stupid and forced. Like the guy saved his life and gave you the ultimate healing factor. It also came from his mentors enemy which is in a way top tier revenge so I don’t see how that’s violating like the mc is honestly being whiny and pathetic.

The plot is repetitive. The mc faces a powerful opponent, gets injured, recovers, gets revenge. The fights are mostly prolonged to the point of being dragged out. The mc personality is interesting but the world building is also rinse and repeat. The whole universe world building makes little sense and the power structure is inconsistent and scales without a consistent measuring system.

She has no idea what she’s talking about when it comes to magic or justice lol

The mc isn’t gonna start simping like your other novel right? Hiding his new element only to reveal it during the tournament to us readers doesn’t make sense. Like I get you want to surprise us but that’s not how a writer should go about it. It like your breaking the fourth wall without actually breaking it. You either do it or you don’t not hover in between. Asher doesn’t make sense to me rn cause strength is all that matters in this world but it’s like sometimes he goes all in on gaining power while other times he’s just aura farming doing nothing. Just give us a direction or purpose otherwise isn’t it meaningless?

That’s a simple view of character. Probably an adolescent level of philosophy of good and evil…

Lmao

The writing is fine but the dialogue is terrible. The mc is just shocked or panicking anytime he speaks or reacts. The novel could have been great if the mc was more level headed and not so dramatic.

The writing quality is trash and the power system constantly changes names. The mc is a pushover and constantly states his emotions like a weirdo. Honestly he doesn’t know how to say no.