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not to mention with a drought that dried up all rivers in the surrounding areas it would be hard to explain why you have fish so its better to sell fish

the idea is good but everything else is so ass like grammer some sentences are so horrible its hard to see what its supposed to be telling. the MC has memories of a past life that are inconsistent because one moment he knows how to make guns and the other he is a soldier saving kids, another problem with those memories is that the MC said he only sees his memories when he sleeps and a few minutes later he has them when he is awake and apperantly change to what he wants to know. another problem some things how the MC gets are not explained or how he knew not to mention the other characters are all mature and act stupid but for a place that is said to also have 17 year olds its a bit weird all the factions are run by 14 or 15 year olds.