btw you new viewer? Thanks for being proactive my guy

It's not about whats cool... the Mc has to prove he know stuff no one does from this world to prove he really transmigrated

I absolutely hate yuri between harem members

the guys below you are real psychos lol

Bro what is wrong with you🗿☠️ Clingy yandere? Dommy Yandere? (dislike it personally) Subby Yandere? What type of yandere do you like?

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bruh... what?☠️

try checking my other normal, its not mine but I temper with the narration to make it more satorical. Itz pretty decent.

I see, thanks for the response boss.

You are welcome boss.

Can you give more attention to the lessar heroine like mai, Ai and other heroine besides dxd and to love ru

Thanks.

Thanks bro.

I see, I shall try to make it more concise for future reference. Apology for my late reply.

The writing quality was good, although the paragraph could have been seperated for easier read. Character development was executed decently but it could hve been better with mor ebuild up and suspense. The pacing was 5/5, though transitions was a bit rough, the characters are very likeable, certain areas are lacking in clarifications, like the interaction and actions. also, some phrase like, "he couldnt help", "he said", "he sigh" etc were continued quite obcessantly, they were redundant in certain areas (the firat chapter mostly). Avoid directly saying what it is, using things like "suddenly", "he was angry", "he felt" and try to deliver the suddenness or sensation with actions instead. For example instead of saying "he was annoyed" to "He narrowed his eyes and click his tongue". The phrasings and execution, lastly was a bit lacking. overall decent but it coldve been a lot better. I hope you could continue.

also, some phrase like , "he couldnt help", "he said", "he sigh" etc were continued quite obcessantly, they were redundant in certain areas (the firat chapter mostly). Also avoid using things like "suddenly", "he felt" and try to deliver the suddenness with acfions instead. overall decent but it coldve been a lot better

A good read.

Are you just gonna drop this? Its been sometime since you update

The plot and development is very good, but the writing quality can be better, use a stronger verbs and cut the less redundant information. Also, id recomment splitting the paragraph into a smaller substance will make it easier to read. Last but not least, make the transition more concise and smoother transitions between the setting...... a Very good read tho. Id like to check your other works.

hey its been sometime when will you upload again?