Like I said before , the narration keeps changing form

Hunters, not Hunter's

come on, not common

Sorry I am correcting you here, I am busy so can't chat you up, but you used punctuations wrongly here

uhmm, I thought she could not control her magic

the line was vague, what is they had an issue in town and the curfew was 6

I can see the work out into this chapter, but the author should not make certain errors, like the obvious switch in narration style. also, it gave a good image of the fight, but it didn't give me enough reason to care about the MC, even if her type of people were getting arrested, there should be a story that will make me care for her and be in her side, right now o am on nobody's side, because all o knows os that they were being hunted, but why are they getting hunted, why should I care about the getting hunted?

In this paragraph , you suddenly switched from third person narration to first person narration, why the change, is she the one telling the story or the narrator , they can't he two narrators here

the author possesses a very refined vocabulary, but the excessive use of complex grammar is only showcasing her vocabulary , but not painting any picture in my head, for the sake of connecting to the reader, I suggest reducing the overly grandiose grammar, and instead aim to connect with the readers emotions .

introduction of the character was a bit forced, they could have been more done to this first paragraph to give to life and emotion from this paragraph, all I see is wind and a girl in an alley, was it night or day?

when a mental state of a person is damaged by oast experiences, their mind sets a wall, for Ezra it is to never be under someone, never be a pawn again , and he feels that the day he bows he will become the old him from earth, weak and unable to do anything for himself, so he refuses, this is am illusion set by the mind

change will come, yeah, I think external influence will make him a better, but it will take some time , I think he will view his friends as pawns for a while, buy their importance will get higher, maybe to the point where he won't even want to sacrifice the pawn

cuz he is weaker, still if a fight broke out between them, he would surely fight. also he hated the fact that it was people that didn't do enough to get into class one, yet they were mad at the people that did. the half elf was in his right to be proud, cuz he was strong,

yhup

yhup, an ability that ain't for fighting , buy can still be used to aid in a fight.

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Thank you all for taking the time to read Rise of the shadow demon , I'll talk a little on this book here, so yeah let's get into it. Ezra Blackwood is filled with rage, but that doesn't make him a completely antisocial human, he can relate with someone, as long as that someone is of value to him, or in other words a pawn. Still on that note, he is dark inside, he will drop a person at any time, he will be the one to stab a comrade to death when he is no longer in agreement. This is just who he is, he only sees his goal, the only person that he really cares about is Lisa, and the reason is not known, he just feels the need to be there for her. Still he hopes that a day will not come when he has to choose her or his goal. the shadows real is an almost infinite place, and there will be a while lot happening there, so Ezra's rise will happen in the two worlds and they will all lead him to his goal, or so I think. another thing that we should look out for when reading is that the power setup in the shadow real will be vastly different , they will have their own logic there. The shadow realm is also not just filled with stupid shadows, no their intelligence grows as they get stronger. There is more that would be talked about for the book , but you'll get your answers in the book itself. 🙌🙌🙌✌️✌️✌️

I'll keep and Open mind and hope for certain things to be explained in future, still that shouldn't be too far off right?

you shouldn't push such things off into the future, it should be explained early .

What are dream creatures labelled as? i didn't see any of such information, shouldn't they be a whole chapter before this one to explain certain things ?