Pocket_AI

You have 6 chapters, 3 of which are useless info and promotion of another fic. That leaves us with 3 chapters... But no, first one is written using another language for some reasons. I guess we have 2? Oh, also Nessi chapter is just a bad retelling of original show, mc does literally nothing whole time. So... 1 out of 6? Yeah, that sounds right.

What lie? Text quality IS bad, unless you are 15 and just started. If that is the case, then - good work.

Either AI or just really bad text quality, especially everything related to Hokage and inner thoughts of characters. ........ ..............

Realistic doesn't equal good. Especially in writing.

Dialogue with the knight in the end. Everything they say are incredibly simple statements with incredibly pretentious words. 'Looks can be deceiving' is just horseshit in mc's case - he/she can and will die to a breeze.

The dialogue in the end is pretentious, nonsensical and generic at the same. Impressive. Also - drop.

It's a fic about mc beating up nobodies. I'm pretty sure 95% of characters never even appeared in the show. So... I kinda don't care about 95% people present here. That's bad.

No, he didn't. 'Conquered characters in the first few chapters'. What are you ever talking about, it's probably most generic start of the fic one could think of. It's not bad, but far from good as well.

Renaming already published fic/book is usually a bad idea, just as adding talking system with personality.

1. Explore what? All he does is tries to get more point. No moral dilemma (except one idiotic time with father), no interesting choices (or do you think that one talk with that noble girl counts for ANYTHING?). Maybe waiting for 1000 to roll is something that shows how deep mc is? 2. Characters... His father... talks like a villain, does thing that villains do, tries to manipulate in the dumb villain way, starts laughing when mc becomes indifferent to suffering of others... I wonder - maybe he is not lying? No, I maybe be wrong, 50 more chapters, 2 or 3 more thousands dead in his name and I'll judge. Mother is ok, but not for 17 chapters, all that happened in those could be at least half or third as long and lose only unnecessary text. I guess Agatha may be counted as a character? What was her 'screentime'? Less than 5 minutes? Also again: that dialogue where mc is doubting the info about his mother during first meeting with totally-not-a-plain-villain is literally dumb. Cult leader guy basically confirms what mother already said and implies idiocy in the such basic ways that it makes mc looks half-brained for having ANY doubts at all. And no, saying that was 'sneaky' mind control wouldn't be smart, but too oblivious and overused. 3. You didn't name you fic after DnD or Faerun, but BG3 directly. Are you surprised that I expected BG3? You can write whatever original stories you want, just don't act when people call you out for your obvious click-baiting. 4. Your system literally said it was smug. Dialogues with it had zero meaning and literally waste time. Just ask yourself what would change if you replaced it with just panels. Nothing?