Hey! I read your story because it piqued my interest. Its a good story but their are some things you can be mindful of. Firstly, the sequence of the story is quite same in all the chapters which made it a lil boring. Secondly there are very less dialogues and more detail which somewhat made me lose my interest sometimes. Over all, the plot was good and the use of vocabulary is great. But next time i hope there’s some difference in the chapters.