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dude I have no idea who these people are anymore. none.
ahhh i see. now I understand the problem. you think what u want matters to us. well it doesn't not get back at your desk and start writing. we don't got time for ur dreams and needs. now get to work j/k........ well not really
dude doesn't let logic dictate his story. I mean he's said this competition was in a week and then let like a moth go by. nothing makes sense
this isn't the first bad Grammer of this chapter. I'm too lazy to flag everyone of them.
ugh I hate this kind of suspense author is doing. the whole u all think this is a fight when really I entered code into computer secretly mua ha ha type of suspense sucks. by the way I know it's not going to be a code into a computer or anything like that that was just an example
i wish u would make up your mind about his personality. he can't be a super cool assassin that even if we say his whole life was him just being abused but was somehow still innocence eyes of youth there's no way a guy could be a top assassin and be that inept. I mean how could he infiltrate a party? I mean one girl flirting with him at the party would turn him into a creeper. I will objectively say it would kind of make sense that mom would want daughter to hook up with strongest male that could lead their guild I think it makes sense on paper but your execution of it makes it come off cringy and a very gutteral part of me is like nope but I know logically it makes sense just the way u word it. I'm not trying to be mean I'm giving u my honest opinion because I like story just parts of it are bad
what is the point of this? it wasn't funny.
author the more he uses shadow walk can u explain to me why the govt wouldn't feed him shadow cores to use his ability? or why didn't he get f ranks stones he couldn't eat and exchange for shadow himself?
that's the standard
why do u jump from perceptives like that? u were at first describing stuff as mc looks at it and then u are like a figure jumps out. that's usually used at beginning of a chapter. there's no point in doing it that way
maybe u should call this something else?
u could of included something like "despite being an ability user with weak ability he was still stronger than normal humans
dude why are u arguing with people like that? even the best masterpiece is criticized harshly. if it doesn't apply let it fly . why spoil ur own book for someone who probably won't stuck around?
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