HersheyHeist

I am mad 4 u

What kind of BS is that bro you went to Rayfield, but didn’t get a Caliburn.

Her name is Hanare not Karin.

Amazing story, unique perspective, and very fresh. I really like it. I hope you keep writing it and keep posting it daily. If possible, please increase the frequency of your posts or the length of the chapter. Great job!

Give him better powers right now. It’s just like Pokémon there should be a reason why he’s doing what he’s doing besides the system and the reason for these girls to accept it.

Great chapter, but I would appreciate it if you can update more often. Thank you.

I’m giving this a low rating not because the premise is bad, but because the execution currently has a lot of logical inconsistencies. The core idea is genuinely interesting, and you clearly have a unique vision for where you want the story to go. That’s why I’m still reading. But right now, the pacing and logic undermine the premise. A few specific issues: 1. Itachi cannot read memories through the Sharingan. That’s not how the Sharingan works in canon. 2. The Kyuubi also cannot read memories either. That ability has never been established. 3. Naruto would realistically be under heavy ANBU surveillance as a jinchūriki, especially as a child. He wouldn’t be able to casually wander into the Uchiha compound without consequences or attention. 4. The protagonist adapts way too quickly to the world. Knowing Naruto through a manga does not automatically translate into functioning perfectly inside that world. Reading fiction and living in reality are completely different things. Manga exists for entertainment and simplification; an actual world would be far more unpredictable and difficult to navigate. So the MC shouldn’t instantly start dominating situations just because he has meta knowledge. 5. The pacing is way too fast overall. The moment he transmigrates, he immediately starts making dozens of advanced plans, figuring out sealing techniques, creating eye seals despite having zero sealing knowledge, and acting like an experienced strategist. None of that feels earned because there’s no foundation for those abilities yet. The main problem is that the story skips the process. The MC needs time to learn, struggle, experiment, fail, and adapt before pulling off advanced ideas. Right now, it feels like he’s operating with endgame competence from chapter one, which removes tension and makes the world feel less believable. I’m criticizing this because I actually like the premise and think it has potential. But the execution needs slower development, stronger internal logic, and more grounded progression for the story to really work. I will stop reading now (Chapter 2). Should you rewrite it? I’d be glad to continue reading it and update my review.

Thank you for the chapter bro, but I have noticed that your chapters are getting smaller. Please make them bigger or at least increase the frequency of the uploads.

Is it Kaede Kithara or Hagoromo. FYI, we have a Hagoromo clan used to be in Kiri. Do I do remember they were wiped out I don’t know by who and when.

Why is the translation so bad?