This is actually really good for your first novel and compared to your fan fiction. The world background could use some work cause you only have one kingdom the Phoenix kingdom but I like how all other nations' leaders are related. the writing quality can be improved there are some mistakes or missing words

update please

Post more. Everything is good. The MC is betrayed, neglected, and scapegoated. He is OP, like more OP than Anos. He goes from innocent to savage. He is like Gohan.