According to your suggestion, the story can be more intresting but there are some flaws here, as Major X is a character which was depicted very briefly in the start, that gave the reader two final verdict, either he has very important role or he is just a supporting character. for the familial relations, this is a tritagonist story so you will find inside the future chapters. Although there might be some confusion still left because of only having text format, when it will be visualized then, the suggestions made by you can create a rewarding advancement inside the panel flow. summing up, thanks for the review.

thank Pocket_monsters, very cool