it's good written and i like the characters very much. but maybe a little more descriptions for creating a certain atmosphere. i like it how you explain their thoughts behind their actions. keep it up!
your good in making descriptions of the surroundings. but sometimes you give to much information in one blow. i had to struggle true his transformation and fighting progress.
you caught my attention and curiosity. but maybe a little more description from persons and places. it s difficult to feel the vibe of the story.[img=recommend][img=update]
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