Vladimir_1524

1 chapter was enough for your work

I hope this doesn't become a story with consistent multiple povs

great intro chapter. keep up the good work

so the thing talking to him isn't a system and instead the mc is a schizophreniac?

a power fantasy and engaging writing are not mutually exclusive. raise your standards and stop reading slop.

this whole story is cringe. we get a bubble boy mc who can't do anything because his 'mommy' won't let him and then he pledges to uphold the family name after what happened in his last life. I could get chatgpt to write a more compelling story than this slop

the story starts well with an interesting cast and setup but quickly devolves into tedium. the mc acts like a spoiled brat despite being an adult mentally. he's also just a cog in everyone else's game despite how grand and important he tries to make himself seem. great potential but wasted execution

these last few chapters are really starting to degrade the quality of the novel. the mc acts nothing like someone who was driven and dedicated in his past life, he doesn't use his system wisely like a successful adult would. what's the point of keeping his memories if he acts like a spoiled brat that's his age (5)

The story starts well with good pacing and sufficient tension but very quickly devolves into a deus machina trope. Here is an example :mc creates a basic pistol with a limited quantity of small caliber bullets. Okay, that's pretty well balanced in a world with monsters. That lasts literally for 1 chapter. Next he makes a semi auto rifle with an untold amount of ammo and single handledly takes down a group of bandits. Great, well there goes all the tension. But wait, there's more. The very next chapter, he creates an anti-material rifle to deal with well armored monsters.

lame